Narrated Intros – Looking for Feedback

photo of Lang ElliottWhen I listened to Woodpecker Interlude this morning, I felt that my narrated introduction sounded too contrived, as if it were being read. So I re-did it and uploaded the new version into the post, hoping to achieve a more laid back, personal style. Please check out the new version (included below) and let me know if you like the way I’m doing the narrative:

Dawn chorus and trickling brook. 5:19 am, 14 June 2010, Shindagin State Forest near Caroline, New York. Recorded by Lang Elliott.

Here is the old version of the narrative. It’s slower and sounds to my ear like it’s being read:

Dawn chorus and trickling brook. 5:19 am, 14 June 2010, Shindagin State Forest near Caroline, New York. Recorded by Lang Elliott.N

I’m looking for feedback here! I want to home-in on the right style for the narrative. It should have a relaxed and personal feel to it, yet be brief and to the point (my yapping should last no more than thirty seconds).

Comments

  1. The recording of your voice in the top version is great. It flows better than the older version which is also good.
    You are too hard on yourself.

    • Kirk: If I’m going to speak, it might as well be chatty and personal. This coming spring, I hope to post a number of recordings direct-from-the-field, each including me describing the event right as its happening in real time—non-scripted and non-edited personal experiences from the field.

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